Thursday, December 11, 2008

Another Paper Update

Today I finished my essay. After I write this, I am going to edit my paper and print it. As painful as it was for me, I was able to find arguments about the positives of factory farming.

When I looked over the first half of my paper, I found that my biases were coming through in my language. I kept saying things like, "slaughter," instead of kill, as well as other poor word choices. I tried to cut as many of those out as I could, but there are probably still a few contaminating my paper.

6 comments:

AHugs. said...

I also have a strong opinion regarding my topic, so I know what you mean when you say that your biases were coming through. It has been much harder than I had expected it to be to keep myself unbiased in tone. But anyways, good job being aware of your vocabulary choices!

Annalee said...

Wow! It must have been hard to find positives about factory farming! I wouldn't be able to do that. My biases were showing through too, but I bet your paper is great! I hope I get to read it, it sounds really interesting.

Arnold Friend said...

I would have a very hard time writing positives for factory farming... I think I would have run across the same problems you have. Bravo for trying to make it unbiased! I can't believe you found positives for it... I didn't even try to make mine more unbiased, because I don't think I could have completely neutralized it. Good luck with yours!

Bailey Nuckols said...

Abby I also was having a hard time writing about the opposing side. It is good that you realized it in your own editing process, it took me asking a friend to proof read it and them pointing out my biases.

amster weird man said...

I think it is hard not to express ones opinion when writing a paper that one obviously has a belief about. That is definitly the hardest part in this assignment. It is almost impossible not to reveal ones opinion when one writes.

Unknown said...

Abby-
I didn't have exactly the same problem as usuing such vocabulary in my paper, but I think that was very good of you to watch your word choice so you will not have a biased opinion in your paper. In your next paper, I think you can start using that language.

-Erin